This is my Comic life. I hope you like it.
Here is my writing could The dare-devil slide
I was high in the air, then out of the blue I see a extraordinary slide. I Feel like I will puke in one or two seconds 1 2 oh not yet wops. I am going down The daredevil slide I get pounded by a bucket of wind and a bit of water in my face somehow. I carry on down the freezing slide on my then bam! i get hit by a pile of leaves in my face I say I can't see I can't see where am I going I am freaking out right now AHHH!!. I have 5 more minutes until I break the world record!.
I have done it I have broke a new world record, all my family and friends were there I was overwhelmed with this excitement flowing through my body.
Great work Daniel. My story is kind of the same as yours. It is a world record story. Your dare devil slide is awesome. Well done:)
ReplyDeleteCool Daniel.
ReplyDeleteThat is a great piece of writing you have come up with using the picture.
Well done ,
From Brody.
Wow Daniel great story its so cool good job.
ReplyDeleteAwesome writing Dan,
ReplyDeleteI like the part then out of the blue great start to your story.
Keep up the good work.
Well done Daniel!
ReplyDeleteI love the comic you created to plan and then present your writing with. Clever and effective!
Wow Daniel I like the name and the style of the comic life. Its Great
ReplyDeleteGreat writing Daniel!
ReplyDeleteI like the start, its awesome and makes me want to read on. I like the end also. Well done:)