Autumn

Autumn 

2/05/12

Autumn is here

Autumn has come

with a bucket of crinkly leaves 

When you walk to the park you see 

pile of leaves that have fallen from the trees.                     

While you're walking home 

you see a car going past 

and you get pounded 

by a bucket of leaves 

and they get stuck to your face.

                                                                                 By Daniel Minogue

WALT: observe and include specific details in our writing SUCCESS CRITERIA	SELF ASSESSMENT
Includes four nouns (from observation)
Made the nouns do something
Started each new description on a new line
Extended each line so it makes more sense (may include a who, where, why, what, when).