My biggest achievement
Bam! I'm playing hard out right into the action packed rugby game. Boff! I pounded a big guy in a gigantic tackle. My nose starts bleeding but continued on the amazing game. Skadoosh! I scored a whopping try out of the blue so fast it was in like 30 seconds. The crowd is going wild over me. I felt so alive at the time.
Wonderful strong verbs in this writing, Daniel!
ReplyDeleteYou bring the reader right into the action of the game. You should share this with Mr G!
I like the way that you get the reader involved Daniel. I like those big words too!
ReplyDeleteExciting story Daniel, great choice of words and really enjoyed you use of feelings in your writing. i.e "I felt so alive at the time"
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